Night Mistress

Oooh, i have to say that this getting interesting. You introduced James and Victoria. I be in the next chapter, you are going to bring some of the Cullens in, ...

This piece is really good. I like how you made Nina in Perfect girl with no faults and the another girl with no faults, so that they balance each together ...

Again, the emotion in this story overwhelm me. You do such a good job at it. It's like you turn a real-situtation and put it into another story and make ...

Ooh, I sense jealously eating away at Sophia. I am getting confused though. I thought Sophia didn't like Carmen that way. I think they make an interesting pair if that ...

again, you need to space the paragraph out a bit more. everything looks ok, but don't go on my word. like i said, i'm not a reall good crit like ...

you need to spacing out the paragraphs a littl bit more, like 3 sentences maybe. also watch your sentences, i'm not quite sure, but it looks like some run-on in ...

I see you rewrtten the chapter. it's sound evening better than before. I'm a sucker for vampire romances, so you will see me around when you finished the another chapter, ...

Wow. i have to say that was one of the most strange love story i have ever read. It felt read the whole time i was reading that, and it ...

wow. that is truly a different take on the character of twilight. i can practically feel the hatred coming from Bella at the end. Also when she seeing her mother ...

it is a really good book. i picked it up since it had an interesting book cover and i just fell right into the story because it was so good. ...

that's not true. you have french club, ems. anyways, this is very.....different and interesting all in the same go. oh, to tell you, i bring IT(the book i was talking ...

Wow! Ems, this is really good. It was worth the waiting. anyways, i can find anything wrong with it, i will re-read it later to see if i can find ...